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    dots Submission Name: cross my heartdots
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    Author: boo boo
    ASL Info:    18/f/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 108/104/60
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotscross my heartdots
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    i cross my heart
    and hope to survive the hurt.
    hope to die
    knowing what you say is just another lie
    stick a needle in my eye
    morning come night be done my soul will soon fly.




    Submitted on 2007-03-30 19:25:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was really good n diffenet..the only thing is in the 2nd line Live out the hurt or come up wit another..with th eword hurt in it throws of the whole rythm other than that great job

    well hope to hear from ya n keep up the good wrok..

    Max
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    Lil'Mix
    | Posted on 2007-03-31 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]


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