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    dots Submission Name: What Do You Do?dots

    Author: roses
    ASL Info:    13/F/Wherever you want me
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 44/57/25
    Words: 198
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    dotsWhat Do You Do?dots

    what do you do when you want to fall
    when the climb doesn't seem worth it at all
    when the pain makes you feel so small
    and you don't want to think, you just want to bawl

    what do you do when the pain is too much to take
    when the agony in your heart is more than an ache
    when your life is a nightmare and you can't wake
    and at times you feel like your exsistance was a mistake

    what do you do when crying isn't enough
    when inside, your crumbling, but on the surface you're tough
    when your cheeks are stained and your voice is rough
    and the cause is more than chicken soup could label as "tough stuff"

    what do you do when your heart can't beat
    when your soul is empty and incomplete
    when the tears themselves want to retreat
    and you wish that life had a key called delete

    what do you do when the poem is done
    when the words are over, but the pain has just begun
    when the clouds won't stop harassing the sun
    and you're staring down a bullet, and the gun has won

    Submitted on 2007-03-30 21:57:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      omg. i have a poem just like this. except yours is longer. and more poetic. (and mine was like in a journal) yeah. i understand. i fell in love with the last stanza. this is my new fave.

    | Posted on 2007-03-30 00:00:00 | by Kay | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow that was really good, and I felt like I understood the pain in it. It made me feel like crying... but I still liked it.
    | Posted on 2007-03-30 00:00:00 | by T. Garrett | [ Reply to This ]

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