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    dots Submission Name: i am only a mistake dots
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    Author: Kay
    ASL Info:    15/f/
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 216/197/68
    Words: 240
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       i really dont know. life is great. i'm always laughing. smiling. but there are some things in life. that i cover up. things i wish i never did. and yeah. this poem. its a long story(its depressing 4 me). but say whatever you want. corrections can be helpful. or relate. or something.


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    An inadmissible truth of what really hurts; that uncovers the lies buried deep beneath the dirt; to lament all about him. I am just 'some girl' in his life

    Every night; I'll dream up a new illusion. of something I know can never become true love. Just a false interpretation misleading my useless brain. To think all about him. I am 'no one' in his dream.

    Poisoned pen upon your doorstep; with a 'dear hate you' & 'sincerely love you'. I have fallen in this predicament. How ever; when ever did I meet you. You are; what I am "wasted breath". to think; no; I know; I am a 'mistake' in his existence.

    If I could go anywhere. I would drag myself away from this place. I wont try to call to see if you care. and to forget about you would be a blessing upon my pain. I am a 'no one' when I appear in a distance from his face.

    For so long, I've wasted my thoughts for you. Couldn't I see I am wrong. That I am not good enough for you?


    Didn't I think twice b4 I fell for you? Why didn't I stop myself?


    and to know that everything you ever did will be something you'll regret later in life. to know it is something I will hate myself for...


    I am only a mistake.




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      This was really sad, I'm sure you're not a mistake in anyone's life. No one is a mistake, and if this person makes you feel this way, you shouldn't be around them. Life is supposed to be full of joy and smiles. But you have to work through the obslicles to get the joy and the smiles. Keep up the good work, and I'll keep reading

    Saint Razor
    | Posted on 2007-03-31 00:00:00 | by brknprclndol | [ Reply to This ]
      i have to say, i know exactly how you feel. it's not very often i let out the sad, depressing thoughts and feelings in my mind, usually keeping them buried deep down away from the public eye.
    There are a few spelling mistakes and such, but put it in word and you should be able to get most of them fixed up.
    Keep it up
    Regards, Kalinda
    | Posted on 2007-03-31 00:00:00 | by Kalinda | [ Reply to This ]


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