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    dots Submission Name: afardots
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    Author: salvete
    Elite Ratio:    5.34 - 3/3/3
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    my attention deviates to a manís gasp for air
    my eyes follow his hands
    as he reaches to retie the loose
    knot of his shoelace
    sitting from afar, in a deep trance
    i see the frustration of his brow
    unaware that he is the subject of my thought




    Submitted on 2007-03-31 00:50:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thanks for your comments and interpretations Dan. Actually, it is quite the contrary. My thoughts were merely an observation of a random stranger...
    | Posted on 2007-07-01 00:00:00 | by salvete | [ Reply to This ]
      quite the interesting read, I must say. I was more or less astonished, did not expect this from the title. But a good title choice never the less.

    It is well written, to me it is either a shy lover or a stalker. If that thought offends you, my apologies. But that is what I take from this, it reminds me of being the shy kid who never could get close to the opposite gender, so I'd just keep my distance. Enjoyed it, congratulations on a great write.

    Very well done
    ~Dan
    | Posted on 2007-03-31 00:00:00 | by djtswing | [ Reply to This ]


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