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    dots Submission Name: Hide The Real Youdots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/153/74
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Mirror or Mask
    Total Views: 724
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    Description:
       Just a poem about lying to yourself and hiding your true self


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    dotsHide The Real Youdots
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    Dye your hair
    Change your face
    You do anything
    To keep your place

    Lie to everyone
    Lie to yourself
    What's done is done
    Put your heart on a shelf

    Numb your pain
    Hide the scars
    Do it again
    Hide who you truly are

    Be the perfect child
    Don't ever make them worry
    Tell them what they want
    Make sure they never see

    Time is running out
    And so are your lie
    Time to close the curtain
    and say your last goodbye....




    Submitted on 2007-03-31 02:07:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The fourth stanza was kind of off with the rhyme scheme but other than that it was a good piece. Its funny I find this relating to me more than I would want it to.

    From Behind My Mask,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2007-04-01 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]


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