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    dots Submission Name: Finished Chaptersdots
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    Author: fiery whisper
    ASL Info:    21/F/Bangladesh
    Elite Ratio:    5.13 - 51/49/33
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 147
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 907



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    dotsFinished Chaptersdots
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    Where do passing memories fade,
    Across bridges of darkness they take us
    Amid ripples of water and the turbulence of storm,
    They surrender us to the might.

    The might of those lost and forgotten,
    Of times unknown and unwanted,
    They hurl us at the moss ridden gates
    Creaking as the gates open, but one bit.

    And that bit is enough, maybe more
    To show the splendor and the decay
    Tables of shining crystal and swamps for roads,
    They stare at us, taunting and teasing.

    Teasing for that flicker
    That glimpse that brings remembrance,
    They laugh as we suffer
    Staring at what we hardly knew.

    Knew, we did, those chapters of history
    Faded, they died, in dust worn shelves
    Ghosts they had become, those times of ours
    Ghosts, they were as they haunted us.




    Submitted on 2007-03-31 10:00:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked how you connected the paragraphs with the last word of the previous, it really helped the flow of the poem.
    Really enjoyed it,

    Thanks,

    Spin

    | Posted on 2009-07-18 00:00:00 | by Spin | [ Reply to This ]
      This is some pretty good poetry here! You have put a real cadence into this poetry--not easy to do without the use of rhyme--I enjoyed this poem a great deal ... clear and sharp descriptions throughout ... a fine piece of work (in line 5 you have "might", do you mean "night"?) bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... michael
    | Posted on 2007-04-14 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      By the way . . . . . . . . . . . . I heard a lot about Bangladesh. How is it there?

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    | Posted on 2007-03-31 00:00:00 | by SilentDreams42 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow....I really liked. You used amazing imagery. I especially like how you ended this piece:

    Knew, we did, those chapters of history
    Faded, they died, in dust worn shelves
    Ghosts they had become, those times of ours
    Ghosts, they were as they haunted us.


    It spoke to me in more ways than one. Nice job.

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    SD
    | Posted on 2007-03-31 00:00:00 | by SilentDreams42 | [ Reply to This ]



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