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    dots Submission Name: Focus ON The Paindots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 569
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsFocus ON The Paindots
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    I focus on the pain
    The only thing
    Thatís been real true to me, not letting me down.
    Letting me know what I'm going to feel tomorrow
    Hatred and sorrow

    How did I become this monster?
    Everyone I know goes down the One way street...
    Full of broken dreams
    Not even God himself can Stich back the seams.

    Welcome all these demons with open arms...
    Demons surrounding me with uncontrollable temptations...
    My face showing no emotion,
    Yet my soul screams for redemption

    My heart was an open door
    Lies u told, to control me
    These emotions can't be bought from a store.
    The hatred I store underneith my thick skin,
    is nothing short a galore.

    No more holding it in
    There are only so many years can I pretend
    Only so many tears can be held with in.
    Hoping you might see the pain in my eyes
    17 years you and still can't not understand

    my life is going to change
    Your not going to have anything to do with it.
    Im sick of me being your hand puppet.
    Hate or Love it
    Im still stuck being a descendant of my father...




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      this is good,
    i have the same feeling bout my mother..she can be such a hypocritical *censored* and i just wish everyday that i dont turn out like her, although i know that in some way i will because i have grown up with her, but one can only dream...
    i really like the stanza...

    "How did I become this monster?
    Everyone I know goes down the One way street...
    Full of broken dreams
    Not even God himself can Stich back the seams."

    this is a very good write, once again i love the stuff you write

    :)
    Bella
    | Posted on 2007-09-07 00:00:00 | by IsabellaAurora | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved the meaning.
    There are so many times I pray
    I don't turn out like my parents.
    I liked the flow. Very good write.

    <33

    }i{Renae}i{
    | Posted on 2007-08-12 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a very deep poem. like the flow..it was very consistent. feels like it came from the heart.

    really liked it
    | Posted on 2007-04-08 00:00:00 | by ImperfectGirl1 | [ Reply to This ]
      babe, you are one of a kind. and that is one thing no one can say about your father. Love.

    this is really deep and it looks like it got a lot off your chest cuz you expressed yourself really well.
    | Posted on 2007-03-31 00:00:00 | by Jessica Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      Yea bro, this is a meaningful, direct write, I like it; it flows from start to end perfectly,
    nice write man!

    ~Matt
    | Posted on 2007-03-31 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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