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    dots Submission Name: My Walkdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    Description:
       This was a writing exercise in which you were supposed to give new definitions for things you might see on a walk. By cannabalistic, I mean that the parking meter is metal, and so is the change.


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    Parking meter-Cannibalistic metal lollipop tethered to the earth.

    Water Tower-A u.f.o. with the lights turned off sitting on a rack.

    Cow-Chemical processing plant with 4 stomachs and 4 legs.

    Pond-Overgrown mud puddle that dreams of becoming a swamp.

    Garbage truck-A noisy putrid monster that eats what nothing else will.





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      Good to get out for some exercise. Walking's good. Limbers you up for more serious effort, like punching out letters in quick succession to convey distantly what is felt most intimately. Let us have it!
    | Posted on 2004-06-12 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      ooo... i really like these! very inventive and outside the square! i personally love the pond one best... dreaming of becoming a swamp... everyone's gotta have a dream... even ponds i guess. awesome work!
    | Posted on 2004-06-11 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Defining - is not an easy thing to do, I found lots of invention here, sense of humour also. But sooner or later those definitions may become true - defining is like creating reality, creating our thoughts and opinions. Very good.
    | Posted on 2004-06-11 00:00:00 | by Nightraven | [ Reply to This ]
      that must have been a productive exercise. i like how you defined the words with a good use of imagination and humorousness. i liked this most of all: Garbage truck-A noisy putrid monster that eats what nothing else will. I find that very accurate, if I see it in your perspective. Take care. xox
    | Posted on 2004-06-11 00:00:00 | by wordsofmind | [ Reply to This ]
      no why was i under the impression that ponds dreamt of becoming lakes...?!

    this is interesting! let me see
    paper = processed trees that lets humans sketch their thoughts on...
    pencil = graphite lead that tries to transalate imagination but doesn't quite come through!
    | Posted on 2004-06-11 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      nice very nice. I love how you shaped up this amazing recipe for a poem. Your writing style is really unique and i like it a lot. Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2004-06-11 00:00:00 | by ares_nuke_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like those descriptions, especially the cow and the garbage truck. original and quite funny. great exercise. hope it keeps your juices flowing.
    | Posted on 2004-06-11 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I definately can say you have a very creative mind. I've never heard of this excercise, but I think you did a good job. It's funny how you can think of everyday objects as something completely different, and I think this was very original. Maybe it could have been longer, I'm sure you saw a lot more on your walk. Nice job though
    | Posted on 2004-06-11 00:00:00 | by Lil Nick | [ Reply to This ]
      what a fun exercise! i may have to try this one! very cool new definitions you came up with, too. i didn't know cows have 4 stomachs! no wonder they're always chewing on something! lol! damn them metal lollipops anyway! funny, dumplin'!
    | Posted on 2004-06-11 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]


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