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    dots Submission Name: self-portraitdots
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    Author: sbridges
    ASL Info:    33/F/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 119/119/63
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1219
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 729



    Description:
       just a description of a self-portrait doodle i did in my journal, I would love suggestions :) shal

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    black, brown, purple, green and yellow hues of a little body
    tippietoes grazing the top of life's bountiful tree
    what should i do with a wee world in my hands?
    ripe hearts growing everywhere like pansies
    an apple thrillingly falling before it lands
    my dream, an offering at my feet
    and I would never want to sleep
    it would all be that easy to eat

    head spinning with forevers and nevermores
    the heights become the floors
    infinities swirling in thoughtful purples and yellows
    middle eye shining like a golden mirror
    full, full heart- sensitive and sore
    bright red like that ripe apple, but a little broken 'fore the core.




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      nice i like the sing-songy kind of flow. like something that brings to mind the summer and sunshine. the apple metaphore is deffinatly a fav

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