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    dots Submission Name: Fat Fightersdots
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    Author: MornSweetSong
    ASL Info:    21/female/wales
    Elite Ratio:    4.42 - 110/83/46
    Words: 252
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
    Total Views: 1098
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    Bytes: 1470



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       I am sick to death of being me. I am disgusting and I want to chop off certain parts of me. Enjoy.


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    dotsFat Fightersdots
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    It's just another fat day
    My rolls of flab bulge at my side,
    I hate feeling this way,
    my hideous, repulsive body I want to hide.

    I go to bed and prey I will feel ok the next day
    but it's a vicious cycle that kills me inside.
    I sit on my vulgar and mishapen ass and cry.
    I've been on diets...God only knows I've tried.

    I am a fucking failure - I stumble at each hurdle.
    When I put on each pound - my stomach curdle's.
    I see skinny people, every day.
    I would DIE to look that way.

    I claw at my flesh, as if fighting my way through.
    Fat to me isn't right - Only skinny will do.
    I was bullied at school - 'You fat bitch' they would say,
    I didn't disagree, just bowed my head and said 'ok'.

    I am a pathetic excuse for a human being, my body is just SICK.
    Love handles on my waist, inches thick.
    I don't deserve to be happy, in my disfigured shell,
    For my inability to starve I should burn in hell.

    I feel like this every single day, no one knows...I pretend I can smile.
    Then I go home and brood on my hopelessness for a while.
    It eats away at me - unfortunately only metaphorically speaking.
    I just wish to God I could stop fucking eating.

    GBG - Leah








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      i would die to not look the way i do 5ft 6in 100lbs everyone take a look at me and just wants to get in my pants men use me its a rule of thumb takin advantage of by my step father and uncle growing up hating my body for I was only ever acknowledged by for my body. feeling as if my body says more for me than my mind ... i hate it and later in life i took a 12gauge to my stomach and unfortantly didn't die ... you ever want to trade let me know i'd be more than happy to

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2010-08-06 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha, this is amazing. I like how the peice wasn't censored. It was straight up. I like the way you can vent your anger and make it an amazing peice of artwork, it really does make me smile. I also really like the way in this poem you made things informal, like you'd be talking to just anybody. The world needs more art like this. It makes be belive that things can actually be relaxed and be beautiful. Which is what this poem is. I really like the way in the third and fourth stanza you used the hyphens, it made the stanza choppy at the right parts, just making them more powerful. It was a pleasure to read. Keepem commin. =]
    | Posted on 2007-04-01 00:00:00 | by Coffee Brake | [ Reply to This ]
      Ohhh, man. I'm feelin' you. The raw anger in this piece is nice. They're always saying, "love your body, embrace the goddess," all that [censored]e. It's refreshing to have someone tell it like it is.

    melora
    | Posted on 2007-04-01 00:00:00 | by Melora | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well, and was very sad. I have no complaints about the poem, it was great, but I don't think you should feel that way. Everybody comes in different shapes and sizes, and everyone is beautiful in their own way. I hope you feel better. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    Saint Razor
    | Posted on 2007-03-31 00:00:00 | by brknprclndol | [ Reply to This ]
      a couple flow problems, but they are overpowered by the raw emotion in this piece, which is nice.

    Hey I know the feeling, but that's genetics. Aren't they just a b.itch? But please, listen to the clichés about loving yourself and how beauty comes in all shapes and sizes because it's absolutely true. I hated myself last year, and so people didn't like me, and I didn't like them. This year, I've learned to love myself as I am. Getting dressed is fun. I love taking pictures and modeling in front of my mirror. My friends know it's not a party without me and I have my first ever boyfriend. I didn't lose a single pound during any of this. It's all in your mind.

    Good luck and keep writing
    ~Venia
    | Posted on 2007-03-31 00:00:00 | by Venia | [ Reply to This ]


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