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    dots Submission Name: bye-bye lovedots
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    Author: lolavie
    ASL Info:    23/female/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 70/175/103
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 647
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1508



    Description:
       finally got everythig off my heart..i feel so much better now


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    dotsbye-bye lovedots
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    Train leaves in under an hour
    still got a few more things to do
    but you can be sure they wont include
    saying goodbye to you

    Bags are packed, in my hand are my car keys
    Recap to make sure that I'm not forgetting
    anything, anything, can't think of anything
    like saying goodbye to you

    I closed the door behind me
    to past and pains, losses and gains
    I pray for a better life to the sky up above
    jump in my car, drive off, bye-bye love
    Ive got the wind in my hair
    free-flowing behind me like all my worries
    I pray for a better life to the sky up above
    when I have had ebough, bye-bye love

    Train leaves in a few minutes
    almost jam packed but still room in it
    I hear someone get my attention
    they're saying goodbye for you

    Can't take back, in my heart-decisions made
    what is it that they could possibly relate
    perhaps nothing at all except
    saying goodbye for you

    I closed the door behind me
    to past and pains, losses and gains
    I pray for a better life to the sky up above
    jump in my car, drive off, bye-bye love
    Ive got the wind in my hair
    free-flowing behind me like all my worries
    I pray for a better life to the sky up above
    when I have had enough, bye-bye love

    ...to be continued








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