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    dots Submission Name: ?desufnoCdots
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    Author: kase
    ASL Info:    27, Winnipeg
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 169/398/234
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dots?desufnoCdots
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    Murder knocked at my door.
    i asked "what brought you here?"
    the wind, no thats not proper.
    the stars? thats too convenient.
    or was it the taste for a place where death prolongs race.
    in any case, i wanted out of this space.
    later that night, Murder came again.
    along with a homeless man without any friends.
    as i watched through the window, secretely forbidden.
    a knife has slit his throat, the street was now reddened.
    the trail of blood poured as paramedics performed furiously.
    and as he layed and died i pondered to myself curiously.
    such a wicked trick that Murder made me see.
    the man that i saw dying, was actually me.




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    ||| Comments |||
      Talk about out of body experience much
    | Posted on 2013-09-29 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved the way you wrote this. It had a good feel. I agree the ending was perfect. Very well done.

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    | Posted on 2007-04-03 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really cool. U made it seem like the reader go see through the main charcter eyes n feel the desbelief...I wouldn't cahnge a thing....I love the ending to it...

    Well hope to hear from ya n keep up the good work


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    | Posted on 2007-04-01 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
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