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    dots Submission Name: ~Suicidal rain~dots
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    Author: allmine
    ASL Info:    25/chick/your nightmares
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 33/69/45
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
    Total Views: 840
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    Bytes: 842



    Description:
       I DID NOT WRITE THIS.. THIS WAS WRITTEN BY MY EX GIRLFRIEND... I LOVE HER MORE THAN THE WORLD BUT THINGS HAPPENED AND WE ARE NO LONGER TOGATHER... WELL THIS WAS WRITTEN BY HER. PLEASE READ AND TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK...


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    dots~Suicidal rain~dots
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    The rain falls from the heavens

    To the depths of hell

    People whisper of their love

    Others reject

    The silent tears that are not shown

    But are realized in the dark

    No one seems to care for them

    And they watch them fall apart

    The suicide increases

    In hopes of making them realize

    Exactly how those people felt

    When the others turned their back

    Hearts beats seemed to vanish

    Souls begin to depart

    Those that go to heaven

    Wish to stay in the dark

    As they wish for this

    It seems to rain on Earth

    Filling people with more thoughts

    Of suicidal rain.




    Submitted on 2007-04-01 14:52:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very intersesting. her work seems pained and deeply thought out. i understand how painful it is to lose the one you love more than you ever thought you could love anyone , but keep yur head high, and try not to dwell to harmfully on the past, remember the best and look to tomorrow, if you can.

    good luck
    ~shadow
    | Posted on 2007-04-01 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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