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    dots Submission Name: Cries For Helpdots
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    Author: black rose13
    ASL Info:    16/f/where do I live?
    Elite Ratio:    1.35 - 137/97/39
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    A man dies the most tragic death of murder.
    It's in the news paper one day, and not one cop is looking for the murderer.
    And now his 5 year old daughter is without a daddy.

    Everyone knows when posers are posing.
    And everyone knows when stoners are stoned.
    So why doesn't everyone know when someone cries for help.

    Everyone in this world is too self-absorbed in the perfect look to realize that there was a baby girl that was just kidnapped.
    And when the family asks for help to find their daughter we turn our heads.
    3 years later they still haven't found their baby girl. (all hope is lost)

    Everyone knows when posers are posing.
    And everyone knows when stoners are stoned.
    So why doesn't everyone know when someone cries for help.

    Another teenage girl gets taken advantage of.
    She tells her parents, they don't believe her.
    Another criminal gets away with the most disgusting crime.

    Everyone knows when posers are posing.
    And everone knows when stoners are stoned.
    So why doesn't everone know when someone cries for help.





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      Neat and nifty and nicely done, and absolutely true! We are a completely and totally self-absorbed society and cannot seem to feel the least compassion for anyone but ourselvest....this poem shows that all quite well... bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... michael
    | Posted on 2007-06-08 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      it was good and it give insight to the way the world is working today. your rite why cant people hear those silent cries and some of them scream out at you good write! i enjoyed it very mucho!
    | Posted on 2007-06-07 00:00:00 | by SecludedSoul | [ Reply to This ]
      aww im sad now. :( i dont think that in a poetry sense that this was great because it was way way obvious and everything but i think that for writing its good because you have a good point.
    | Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      you know if this is about yourself just know one thing im always here for you
    love you bunches<33
    | Posted on 2007-04-03 00:00:00 | by truthbetold | [ Reply to This ]
      ouch. nice write. very poiniont. very sad
    | Posted on 2007-04-02 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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