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    dots Submission Name: Letters to a father who was never there.dots

    Author: boo boo
    ASL Info:    18/f/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 108/104/60
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 822
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsLetters to a father who was never there.dots

    where were you for all those years?
    I once thought you a hero,
    the one who would chase away my nightmares and
    the soother of my fears.

    don't bother coming home
    me and mommy are doing fine on our own.
    it is too late for you to say that you love me
    for 10 years now mommy has made sure that i was happy.

    do you ever think of me?
    the little girl that i used to be,
    i hope you hate yourself for missing out on so many years,
    so daddy this is the end i will shed no more tears.

    i thought i wanted you to be at my 16th birthday
    but i got to thinking that maybe i just want you to stay away
    you had plenty of chances that you didn't take,
    so daddy don't bother thinking of me because i won't accept
    an apology all those years you missed were all your mistake.

    Submitted on 2007-04-01 19:55:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, that was really well written. I can kind of relate. I still live with my parents, but neither one of them talk to me that much. If my mother talks to me she calls me "Girl". My dad just doesn't talk to me at all. Last summer, I spent the whole summer vacation without my dad saying anything to me. yeah, so i have a happy little family.
    For you to be so strong about this is empressive. Mostly you would get the person who at the end would beg for their father to come back. You told him to stay where he was, you and your mother is fine without him.
    I think you should try free verse. You have a lot to say and I think the poem would be really good if you tried. Well I'm done now.

    | Posted on 2008-01-24 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is really deep.
    i really liked it. i'm sorry about your situation.
    keep your head up.

    | Posted on 2007-09-14 00:00:00 | by Kay | [ Reply to This ]
      this is good. i can relate. my parents got divorced when i was 8. im almost 18 now so its been 10 years and he hasnt come around. i dont even think he really cares cuz he was always too drunk when he was still married to my mom. keep it up

    | Posted on 2007-04-02 00:00:00 | by crazyinsane | [ Reply to This ]

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