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A Bit of Chess


Author: Voodoo_Lounge
ASL Info:    21/F/OH
Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 408 /588 /171
Words: 63
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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A Bit of Chess



The naughty glass cut you
Bleeding warm and wet.
Do stop those foolish tears
My pretty pretty little pet.

Glass is quite abrasive-
I taste just how you feel.
Shards digging deeper, hard,
Gashing open to reveal.

Who will care for the flowers
Now that you are gone?
But we both were quite aware
I was queen and you were pawn.




Submitted on 2004-02-01 14:37:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I think if you cut out one "pretty" it fits the syllable structure of line 2 better. And maybe the last line should be "I was queen to your pawn". Just ideas, otherwise, good write.
| Posted on 2004-02-02 00:00:00 | by Scribner | [ Reply to This ]
  nursery rhyme, almost to easy to read, the verses to quickly to realize what you are talking about but i still like it, probably one i would recognize in the future if i found it somewhere else

| Posted on 2004-02-01 00:00:00 | by brokenbatman | [ Reply to This ]


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