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    dots Submission Name: Sugar popdots
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    Author: H.a.n.n.a.h
    ASL Info:    15/f/wa
    Elite Ratio:    2.62 - 5/10/8
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 625
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 666



    Description:
       my mind is chaos


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    dotsSugar popdots
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    Trapped inside as it waits to escape
    Hitting the sides like a pinot grape.
    Being compressed further and further down,
    expecting its over, waiting to drown.

    As it breaks open its top
    All the bubbles are ready to pop.
    Slowly they are disappearing
    with liquid they rush out into the clearing.

    The sugar starts to tingle
    As the bubbles mingle.
    Down my throat it goes
    And leaves a tingle in my nose.

    The tin starts to tip
    and the bubbles then drip.
    It is glides down my throat,
    The empty tin hits the table like a music note.





    Submitted on 2007-04-02 01:20:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked the rythm of the piece it was very desriptive.
    | Posted on 2007-04-02 00:00:00 | by Bloomsbury Set | [ Reply to This ]


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