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    dots Submission Name: 4 a.m. curse dots
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    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 435
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 774



    Description:
       this girl i knew at a time died at exactly 4 a.m.

    i loved her but never told her...

    now i wake up at 4 everymorning till i fall back asleep...

    she died by O.D.ing on skittles and weed...


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    dots4 a.m. curse dots
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    the blood falls onto the page
    and words spell out in blood "how long is forever"
    4 a.m. ...the time that would last forever

    this torture of losing a lost soul
    ...she didnt deserve to die by drugs!
    she wasnt supposed to be consumed by it

    now i have this curse of 4 a.m.
    waking up to the tormenting dreams
    of how i could do nothing to save her

    i begin to regret everything ive done
    regret everyone ive met
    history...repeats itself...

    how can i face this past?
    how can i stop this torment?
    your...no longer around

    i cant do it without you
    if only you knew...if only i told you...
    that i loved you....




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      This is... a heart wrencher... Y-Y
    | Posted on 2011-01-21 00:00:00 | by ShadowsnLights | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. i really like this poem. my ex boyfriend who is my best friend now went to the hospital for skittles and weed too. if i woulda brought him to the hospital any later he woulda died. im sorry that you never got to tell her how you felt. thats gotta be really hard but at least you can write about it....it will help to get some of it out rather than keeping it all in. any way good job

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    | Posted on 2007-04-02 00:00:00 | by crazyinsane | [ Reply to This ]


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