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    dots Submission Name: of thoughts and memoriesdots
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    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 543
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       ...the same girl that stole my heart before i stole hers.
    now its broken for as long as i know her


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    killing the pain momentarilly
    just by seeing her face
    thoughts play over and over
    thoughts of "those nights"
    the ones that made me happy
    just to see her
    and know she was with me

    but that was then
    now it all comes back
    thoughts turn to memories
    of when she left me in the dark
    all turns to depression
    suicide was all that was in mind
    now she's with a guy that WILL cheat on her

    i must say... love is still blind
    i pity her
    but only because i still love her

    ...will i ever be able to say goodbye?




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