are we the killers? -------------------------------------------
destroying our path of self righteousness
to have ride and power
killing all who oppose us
they will run hide and cower
we pull the gun trigger
they hope its empty
jst like our heart
bullets go through thier skull
and we put the visions in the dark
you know..I think this could make a good poem if you fix it up a bit.."to have ride and power" I don't think that makes sense..although I know what you mean..your kinda like me, sometimes the point is out there but doesn't quite make sense..but you can fix the wording..
fix this line into: "They will run, hide, and cower"
and I see some spelling errors..correct them! I don't know if you wrote it on purpose..or you just don't give fuuck..then that would be alright.
and honestly, I don't think the title is perfect for the poem..and I'm only saying this because titles are very important to me..they needa catch the eye..and that one doesn't fit..also you can make the poem longer and much better..Overall I honestly like it..but I am expecting some improvement..
I know this can be a good poem and they're small errors and you can fix em..so that's why I'm leaving a comment..so trust! it's only positive..
p.s. I just realized..I think you meant to write "pride" instead of "ride"..am I right? anyways you know wsupp.