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    dots Submission Name: Reflectiondots
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    Author: lolavie
    ASL Info:    23/female/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 70/175/103
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsReflectiondots
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    Everywhere I go I see your face, everywhere
    I don't know why I smile but I do
    Everybody tells me I'm a fool, and yes it true
    For falling out of love with you

    But it my fault?
    Really?
    That you couldn't see me
    for who I truly am?
    Is it true love
    after all
    even though I don't believe?

    Every time I tried I tried to walk away, every time
    I looked back to see if you're still there
    everybody told me you're a fool, for not wanting me
    to fall, fall, fall in love with you

    It's complicated
    Oh yeah
    Girl meets boy
    and boy meets girls
    You understand it
    after all
    but life isn't make believe

    Let's take a time out
    for now
    go over the
    the truths and lies
    Just take a step back
    after all
    this doesnt really have to end






    Submitted on 2007-04-02 11:37:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked this piece. This was my favorite part:

    Let's take a time out
    for now
    go over the
    the truths and lies
    Just take a step back
    after all
    this doesnt really have to end


    The end definitely spoke to me. It made me think about a lot of things. I, personally, really need to take a step back because I am always getting ahead of myself.

    I also liked how you asked the reader questions. I don't know. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . I just really enjoyed it.

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    | Posted on 2007-04-03 00:00:00 | by SilentDreams42 | [ Reply to This ]


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