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    dots Submission Name: Out of my Lifedots
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    Author: truthbetold
    ASL Info:    20-f
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 38/45/33
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/I hate you
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    dotsOut of my Lifedots
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    the constant fighting
    the profane words,
    the beatings and emotional pain
    of being called a whore.

    the times you went out
    behind my back,
    and screwed some chick
    i can't take that.

    when you came home drunk
    from being at the bar,
    and the numbers on your cell
    meant you went to far.

    you said you'd commit
    and i gave you another chance,
    and told you not to blow it
    for that is your last chance.

    but once a player always a player
    kept up with this strife,
    you can no longer hurt me
    your out of my life.




    Submitted on 2007-04-02 11:53:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh my god i can so relate to this. it seems like you wrote this for both of us. i love this one.
    love you my evil peguin lover.

    <3 your emo penguin
    | Posted on 2007-04-02 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]


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