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    dots Submission Name: the dream was happenstancedots
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    Author: austin
    ASL Info:    22/ Male/ Odessa, Texas
    Elite Ratio:    4.41 - 376/396/84
    Words: 255
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 917
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    dotsthe dream was happenstancedots
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    Fleeting thoughts in a dying vice
    forever feel the sting of ice
    lost sight of what could have been
    internal wars getting the best

    which direction, so little time
    unmarked roads and little signs
    point us down these winding roads
    so here we are, all alone

    kill the vice, flood the gates
    kill the vice, don't hesitate
    lose the weakness, down the drain
    see it through or die in vain

    choked and restrained, with no escape
    loaded like a freight train, without the freight
    just sitting here waiting for the decay
    you when i'm done? YOU KNOW WHEN I'M DONE!!

    Everyone needs a little more than lies
    we all need more than just order and pride
    whats your order? what does it entail
    whats it to you if I fucking fail?

    Kill the vice, flood the gates
    kill the vice, don't hesitate
    lose the weakness, down the drain
    hide the heartache, hide the pain

    you know when i'm done, the time has come
    i've been across the world for you
    i've seen people die for you
    and I know when it's time to leave all this
    not one day goes away, I can't describe
    all these nails i pick out of my side
    seperate the bullshit instilled in me
    for only then I will truly be free
    on the wings of the blackbird I ride
    and chase the years you took from me
    your leaders are not what i want to be
    So i'll go chase my happenstance dream




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      DUDE thats goood. like reallly icy chilll good. I wanna hear this. so i can headbang to this.

    I love the end lines. Its good stuff:

    "you know when i'm done, the time has come
    i've been across the world for you
    i've seen people die for you
    and I know when it's time to leave all this
    not one day goes away, I can't describe
    all these nails i pick out of my side
    seperate the bull[censored] instilled in me
    for only then I will truly be free
    on the wings of the blackbird I ride
    and chase the years you took from me
    your leaders are not what i want to be
    So i'll go chase my happenstance dream "




    yeahhh

    awsome lyrics yo

    peace
    Aylin
    | Posted on 2007-05-05 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it. are you seriously leaving us? well written i like the whole kill the vice thing...
    | Posted on 2007-04-02 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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