Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: the dream was happenstancedots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: austin
    ASL Info:    22/ Male/ Odessa, Texas
    Elite Ratio:    4.41 - 376/396/84
    Words: 255
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 908
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1629



    Description:
       I'm leaving this organization.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsthe dream was happenstancedots
    -------------------------------------------


    Fleeting thoughts in a dying vice
    forever feel the sting of ice
    lost sight of what could have been
    internal wars getting the best

    which direction, so little time
    unmarked roads and little signs
    point us down these winding roads
    so here we are, all alone

    kill the vice, flood the gates
    kill the vice, don't hesitate
    lose the weakness, down the drain
    see it through or die in vain

    choked and restrained, with no escape
    loaded like a freight train, without the freight
    just sitting here waiting for the decay
    you when i'm done? YOU KNOW WHEN I'M DONE!!

    Everyone needs a little more than lies
    we all need more than just order and pride
    whats your order? what does it entail
    whats it to you if I fucking fail?

    Kill the vice, flood the gates
    kill the vice, don't hesitate
    lose the weakness, down the drain
    hide the heartache, hide the pain

    you know when i'm done, the time has come
    i've been across the world for you
    i've seen people die for you
    and I know when it's time to leave all this
    not one day goes away, I can't describe
    all these nails i pick out of my side
    seperate the bullshit instilled in me
    for only then I will truly be free
    on the wings of the blackbird I ride
    and chase the years you took from me
    your leaders are not what i want to be
    So i'll go chase my happenstance dream




    Submitted on 2007-04-02 11:54:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      DUDE thats goood. like reallly icy chilll good. I wanna hear this. so i can headbang to this.

    I love the end lines. Its good stuff:

    "you know when i'm done, the time has come
    i've been across the world for you
    i've seen people die for you
    and I know when it's time to leave all this
    not one day goes away, I can't describe
    all these nails i pick out of my side
    seperate the bull[censored] instilled in me
    for only then I will truly be free
    on the wings of the blackbird I ride
    and chase the years you took from me
    your leaders are not what i want to be
    So i'll go chase my happenstance dream "




    yeahhh

    awsome lyrics yo

    peace
    Aylin
    | Posted on 2007-05-05 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it. are you seriously leaving us? well written i like the whole kill the vice thing...
    | Posted on 2007-04-02 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    139537

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (1) written by endlessgame23
    To the Devil and Candle written by HisNameIsNoMore
    I AM THANKFUL FOR written by Ramneet
    prison written by ShyOne
    Tartarus written by endlessgame23
    Day 5 written by TheStillSilence
    The Unicorn written by BlazeFlamme
    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Etiquette written by saartha
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    to Be like written by KeeperOfLight
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (5) written by endlessgame23
    Relativity written by poetotoe
    i've missed written by mysalvation
    winners circle written by ShyOne
    Still Perfectly Flawed written by armand
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    Dream written by closetpoet
    Life is moments written by Ramneet
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    The Poems Death written by Mepoduo
    Vortex: The Imagination That Is written by KeeperOfLight
    Lost Inside the Race written by ForgottenGraves
    I, Plutarch written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Delicious Stews written by elephantasia
    phantom limbs written by expiring_touch
    Shi written by ShyOne
    Shut Up written by annie0888
    Reliquary of Writ written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry