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    dots Submission Name: Dual Personalitydots
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    Author: truthbetold
    ASL Info:    20-f
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 38/45/33
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
    Total Views: 968
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    dotsDual Personalitydots
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    it's hard to control two minds in one body
    two DIFFERENT minds i might add
    they always fuss and fight to see
    who will take over this corpse

    one side is smart and bright
    very sweet and very kind
    but so dependent and everyone
    takes advantage of this side

    the other side is still very smart
    but bittersweet and tough
    this side's a free thinker but everyone either
    hates or fears this side

    confusion starts to bottle up
    emotions begin to flood
    i'm stuck with not knowing what to do
    sometimes i just want to die

    i am both these personalities
    and at times i can't stand them
    so i hide away and break down crying
    asking why my dual personality




    Submitted on 2007-04-02 12:21:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Are you sure this is done? The last stanza is...missing something...

    That said, I like this piece. The multiple personalities thing is a good way of describing the way that we act in different situations: it's like we become different people depending on what's going on around us. Interesting phenomenon... I've got a few voices in my head, myself, so know you're not alone there.

    Anyhow, if you a) explain the last bit or b) fix whatever may/may not be missing, I might be obligated to add this to my favorites.

    --crimson echo
    | Posted on 2007-04-03 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. i like both of your personalities. you need to try and have them mesh together. maybe they'll like each other. sorry it's a good write.

    <3 emo elmo
    | Posted on 2007-04-02 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]


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