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    dots Submission Name: Safe in the colddots

    Author: nomad knight
    Elite Ratio:    6.66 - 110/75/41
    Words: 226
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       A recent piece about a not so new subject. But i like it and i don't think it is to shabby of a poem. Happy to hear your thoughts, suggestions or what ever you care to say upon reading this poem.

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    dotsSafe in the colddots

    The passion and longing I had for you
    seems to have drained from my veins
    Even the embers of that once bright flame
    were dosed out with blood from my heart

    My open wounds, that ached with infection
    are now closed, cleansed and turned to scars
    Cauterized by the cruelty and indifference
    you awarded my persistent devotion and love.

    Like armor of cold steel my heart hardened
    Protection from the blows of your rejection
    Now that you are no longer my puppeteer
    only those phantom wisps of past can harm

    But my heart remains protected in its armor
    Fortified is its plates of steel and walls of stone
    against the painful inflictions of romance
    and hence dead lies my want of romance

    The affectionate wishes for companionship
    or the lascivious offers of lubricous fruit
    even those of the most appealing young women
    do not spark much interest in my heart and loins

    letters stored away in locked iron bound chests
    paintings that adorn the walls of cold castle halls
    Faint whispers and echoes from ghosts of memory
    are all that remain from our happier bonds ago

    I donít carry on through scorching flames
    Fire does not consume my soul anymore
    Instead in icy cold does my heart stay safe.
    but nothing burns like the harsh uncaring cold.

    Submitted on 2007-04-03 00:54:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      First of all im curious are you a med student or anything of the sort ?
    ok second : I really liek dthis piece its very touching the words you used so perfectly synchronized.... you have talent and im sure im not teh first to say it.
    Anyways i really liked it. ^_^
    | Posted on 2007-05-14 00:00:00 | by Wolfdawn | [ Reply to This ]
      Aww:( I really like this piece no matter how distressing and sad it is. Not one of my favs of the ones you have written but still pretty amazing. I love the language you use and how you seem to say every single way a person could feel closed up, and how much losing someone you love does to you.
    Just a few things, the flow is a bit...strange at parts but otherwise I really like it. No, seriously I do. lol.
    I just hope if this is something that truly happened to you then you can make it through this, someday there will be someone like a fire within you obliterating the cold and making it warm, not for just a while but forever. Im a firm believer in true love and I know everyone has to get there sometime.:)
    | Posted on 2007-04-26 00:00:00 | by blankscreen | [ Reply to This ]

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