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    dots Submission Name: This Life IIdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Rant/Longing
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       Decaded to my Mother


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    dotsThis Life IIdots
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    See what you've done to me?
    Do you understand the extent of my pain
    Or how all I long to do is put this behind myself
    But you cannot allow that to occur
    Can you?
    Because of the guilt
    Because of the mistakes you've made..

    I want to live this life
    I have been given
    I understand it won't all be bliss
    I understand we all have our falls..

    But you keep knocking me down...
    And every time I crawl back up

    Just to have you there to knock me down
    And I feel as if I cannot get up,
    I'm ment to be on my hands and knees.

    Please allow my past to be my past
    Please accpect the mistakes you've made
    And allow me to live this life I have been given...




    Submitted on 2007-04-03 10:48:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      A good plea, If your heart is in the right place the past is only the past; your guilt should rest,
    and you can be excused of things to occur,
    well thats my view,
    hope you get there; hope you find some relief,

    ~matt
    | Posted on 2007-04-06 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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