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    dots Submission Name: wall of despairdots
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    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    had no idea what was going through my head but i wrote the damn thing anyway.


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    dotswall of despairdots
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    we climb this wall of despair
    and grow angry as get higher
    we regret all we've done
    and realize the Truth of the world

    this wall...
    has turned us into something else
    we transform
    and dont notice

    we bottle up emotions
    and put on a show for poeple.
    they cant handle this Truth
    thats been revealed to us

    how long till we break?
    who will get into our heads?
    what will we be thinking?
    will we fall off the wall?
    no...

    instead, we reach the top
    we go all out on everybody
    now...we're the masters
    of the wall
    masters
    of despair




    Submitted on 2007-04-03 13:53:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow! this is an amazing... i love how you begin, giving the feeling that you have been defeated.. but by the time the end comes.. you have over come the wall of despair.. and have proved others wrong.. those who thought you couldn't make it.. great job with this.. really i loved it

    ~!*Jackie*!~
    | Posted on 2007-04-10 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good poem full of emotions and your use of descriptive words really give the reader some good imagery while reading this very powerful poem. This situation must have been very hard for you to deal with and to accept. I never really understood suicide but I guess when life is really hard it is easy to become consumed and overwhelmed to where you just cant take it anymore. But death doesnt seem like an answer to me, and you probably still have so many questions as to why these two would do this to themselves. So sorry to learn of this happening in your life. A very good poem about a very difficult subject. Take care
    | Posted on 2007-04-03 00:00:00 | by psychoneurosis | [ Reply to This ]


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