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    dots Submission Name: Things have changed...dots

    Author: psychoneurosis
    ASL Info:    37/m/Chennai
    Elite Ratio:    3.44 - 37/46/24
    Words: 231
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       well..i guess this would be my comeback from a very long sabbatical...was just listening to dylan today...dunno words just kept pouring...

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    dotsThings have changed...dots

    Take care of your feet lass
    it's a dance floor full of broken glass
    Come, celebrate the death of trust
    Raise a toast, bite the crust

    All simple joes stand in a line,
    Oh you thought you were doing fine!
    You knew the lines, you knew the rules
    Had a faithful cast full of fools

    This is a crazy game, satan's rules
    You talk faith, you are bound to lose

    It's a puppet show, you got that right!
    tugging heart's strings with poetic delight
    You don't hold a string? What a terrible sight!
    You are in the wrong side of the bull fight.

    Snort the coke, Shake your hip
    and as you doze, let it slip
    All talk of love is a teaser clip
    Eulogies, theologies, apologies
    You believed the ad-lib! Holy Jeez!

    Haven't you heard the lines
    standing next to railway lines
    The train's late, you have lost a life
    For the inconvenience, they apologise

    This is a crazy game, satan's rules
    Cheaters win while victims lose.

    Joke of the year, I still care!
    as if I haven't had my share
    Twenty something isn't too long
    But remember that dylan's song

    People are crazy and times are strange
    I'm locked in tight, I'm out of range
    I used to care, but things have changed
    I used to care, but things have changed

    Submitted on 2007-04-03 14:18:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice, bro.
    love the the almost atheist view piont i saw. the whole thing like saying...satan rules the world with these games we play. its all true, bro, all true.
    as i read through this i could see like so many different scenes of a story! ya know?
    or maybe its the small amount of drugs playing around with my head....
    anyways, EXELLENT write!!
    tells the truth without holding back.
    awesomeness bro.
    | Posted on 2007-04-12 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow really good...nice way to express the world...if that's what it all means...maybe, if the poems about you, you shouldn't give up...and you should keep caring. Nice poem though... :)
    | Posted on 2007-04-04 00:00:00 | by never_far_away | [ Reply to This ]

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