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    dots Submission Name: Duskdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       The sunsets in Arizona desert rival that of Maui in my eyes. I was feeling very optimistic and thankful for Life when I wrote this last night.

    Love, Peace, Joy


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    As the desert Son
    melts into evening
    horizon aflame
    To the other side
    of terrestrial morn
    whence it came
    And the distant
    mountains
    are awash in hues
    purple and red
    The moon rises slowly
    waking the stars
    to put us to bed
    Bird song is silence
    and cricket symphony
    serenades the night
    All in praise of Creation
    by our Father and to
    Lord seated at His right




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      Wow, I can just see the arizona red sunset in this...putting me to sleep. To the crickets...

    This was just a beautiful expression of how you are thankful for what God has created for you.

    Nice job.
    | Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a beautiful piece of art you have created...I don't take my time out to see the lighter side of literature...I'm not simple minded, I just can't understand most of it...But this is great...I like the imagery and the powerful wordings that you have used inside of this poem...It's magnicificient...And I admire that you have this strong faith in God, that's something I lost, and I think I'm going to burn for it...Yet anyways, I love again the diction that you have used in your poem...Great work
    | Posted on 2004-06-16 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]
      This is just packed with gorgreous imagery. This is so beautiful! I liked the play on Son/ sun. I loved "cricket symphony/serenades the night."
    | Posted on 2004-06-11 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      This was awash in more than just beautiful hues.
    Everything was nice in here, but I think there are many more colors in a western sunset than purple and red. I know that you aren't keying in on the colors though.
    Dave
    | Posted on 2004-06-11 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      great imagery I loved reading it, it had a nice calm relaxing feel to it. did you mean sun instead of son? just wondering , didnt know if you did that intentionally.
    | Posted on 2004-06-11 00:00:00 | by Broken Angel | [ Reply to This ]
      very nice with a little religion thrown in, which I would leave out but if that's what you're into, that's great. the poem is very good, with or without the biblical references. keep up the great writing.
    | Posted on 2004-06-11 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      Good observation and discripitve telling. I like this one! it shows you have appreciation for the creator, when the rest of us take our surrounding (the earth) for granted. This piece was a good flow of words itself. Good Job!
    | Posted on 2004-06-11 00:00:00 | by T.Redd | [ Reply to This ]


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