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The change

Author: Lover girl
ASL Info:    17, female
Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 83 /54 /24
Words: 125
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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I wrote this about a lost love that I have to see everyday. I can't get over how I feel when I am with him. He was always there for me but now I am not so sure. I feel all alone and I don't know what to do!

The change

I feel alone as the walls around me crumble.
My heart is pounding,
My fingers tremble.
The tears run down my face.
I think of you as I always do,
Smiling with true love...
But then the change.
My hope is lost!
Fleeting with our one last kiss.
And deadly in the thought.
I see you here and everywhere.
You haunt my mind and dreams.
I need you,
But the thought I can not stand.
The memories and moments,
You left me
As my tear drops fall.
I hate that I still wish
For your tender loving lips!
My heart is pounding,
My fingers tremble,
And the tears will forever run down my pale face
To fill the void in my broken heart!

Submitted on 2007-04-03 19:51:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I would feel the same way if my boyfriend broke up with me, we go to the same school so i would have to see him everyday like you would be really and my boyfriend have been going out for 2yrs. and 2mons. i know all about love and hard times...may be you should try to talk to your "lost love" maybe y'all can work things out... :( ... :) Very good poem by the way...nicely writen...
| Posted on 2007-04-04 00:00:00 | by never_far_away | [ Reply to This ]

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