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    dots Submission Name: Death in service to...dots
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    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 434
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       ...just try and undertand it okay.
    i really dont feel like explaining it.


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    dotsDeath in service to...dots
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    i sit here and wonder
    why did she die that way
    regreting to let her do so
    and not telling her how i felt

    im never good at timing
    then again....
    i was never good at anything

    i wish she was still here
    so i wouldnt be so miserable
    but its just a wish
    it wont come true

    impossibilities are a torture
    and the past is the source of it all
    how can i ever forgive myself?

    i fight myself
    for not helping her.
    and i blame myself
    for not saving her.

    They say its not my fault
    but i feel that it is
    the pain in my heart
    grows more and more

    Death in service to her enemies that hated
    Death in service of your "GOD"
    will Death ever serve me?
    to be with her again
    ...and tell her everything.




    Submitted on 2007-04-04 09:10:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is something I understand and have the same regrets about.....not telling the person exactly how you felt about them and the situation before they were gone and your opportunity slipped through your fingers, like water in your palm. Wonderful write that will stick with me for a long time.
    | Posted on 2007-04-04 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...its good...i'm really at a lost for words...but it shows a lot of emotion...!
    -Amber-
    | Posted on 2007-04-04 00:00:00 | by never_far_away | [ Reply to This ]


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