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    dots Submission Name: Shattered Heartdots
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    Author: allmine
    ASL Info:    25/chick/your nightmares
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 33/69/45
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsShattered Heartdots
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    A Shattered heart
    is like a shattered mirror
    No matter how well
    you put it togather
    there are still the small
    pieces that will be lost
    At first glance you may not
    notice that they are missing
    but soon that will be all you can see
    The small pieces will get bigger
    The things you loved only a little
    will start to take you over
    they will become all you can think about
    But the difference between a shattered heart
    and a shattered mirror
    is you can always replace a broken mirror
    but once your heart has been broken the
    scars will forever remain..




    Submitted on 2007-04-04 12:33:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A really excellent extended metaphor and so very absolutely true! Most well and most ably done... an excellent piece of poetry! Loved it! bravo ... bravo ... bravo .. michael
    | Posted on 2007-06-18 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      This one was very good. I also like how you compared the mirror with a shattered heart. Your wording was very nicely used.
    | Posted on 2007-04-05 00:00:00 | by t0_eazy | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this, especially with the comparison of a broken heart to a broken mirror, very clever and soooo very true. The little pieces are what make us truly whole and without them the emptiness does get deeper and deeper. I think I'm going to fav this because it speaks to the missing pieces of my broken mirror and the scars on my heart that will never heal. This is just excellent!
    | Posted on 2007-04-04 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]


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