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    dots Submission Name: An Ouncedots
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    Author: WolfStar
    ASL Info:    26/F/California
    Elite Ratio:    6.85 - 119/130/46
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsAn Ouncedots
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    Some mornings I wake
    with only an ounce of myself.

    It is just a moment,
    a flicker
    of Persephone’s long and fruitless winter,
    when all the bitterness of the pomegranate seed
    is distilled
    into a thimbleful of regret,
    an ounce of the last day’s thoughts and mysteries;
    an ounce
    is all that I have become.

    Today I am a mote of soot
    upon the underside
    of a straying star somewhere
    along a lighted dotted line
    that will never taste my devotion
    or scent the staleness in my skin.

    I am too tired to race the sun,
    and yet trail in its faded wake,
    clinging to an old design
    of golden feathers
    and stalks of free and playful wheat.

    Can an ounce of me ever be
    the taste of light inside a bottle?
    There was a time when I believed.
    But gold and silver lose their threads
    under years of silenced love,
    with only enough left
    for another dance
    inside the curve of his hand,
    where I may lose my scent,
    forget my indecisions,
    free from the need for a name.




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      when there is so little of me left...my will to live, my excitement waned to face another day...

    i used to want to get up...couldn't wait to face life, love...i was restless...now i am in total despair, and just don't care.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-07-17 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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