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    dots Submission Name: What do you dodots
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    Author: Ghetto_King
    ASL Info:    19 m ft. lauderdale
    Elite Ratio:    0.76 - 4/33/54
    Words: 307
    Class/Type: Poetry/You left me
    Total Views: 741
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1627



    Description:
       when you think you find the right one and she leaves with your heart and you lose your best friend


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    dotsWhat do you dodots
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    What do you do?
    What do you do when the light that graces your life is fading away?
    As you add fuel to this flame trying to save its place
    You want it so bad that youíll give your life for it and fight
    When it seems as if all youíve work so hard for is running away from your sight
    What do you do when the love that you invested in is breaking your heart slow?
    With ever crack and splinter a sharp pain and the phrase I love you has there is no more
    So much you want to, but seems as if itís slipping away
    Now truly soul searching stuck in this slowed time and place
    What do you do when love donít love you back
    When the structure of feelings we built for one another has crack
    What do you do when love donít love you back
    With just a few lonely nights makes forever seem like a day
    And you contemplate your departure as tears flow down your face
    What do you do when you feel like your best friend has turn face
    Now when you need too talk just a void in this gap, this place
    With her voice brings pain
    The expression we need to talk from ear to ear it rings
    As my heart crumbles with ever word she speaks and that flyís
    Saying this isnít working an my question why
    With a few moments of being a part you have succumb to that feeling of being alone
    Not knowing that our life together will bring those brief moment to shame
    What do you do when the girl you envision as your Mrs. has move own
    And now you left with out a heart feeling completely gone




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