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    dots Submission Name: true perfectiondots
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    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 447
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 482



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       the girl i loved then hated has taken my breath away again. but this time i stay quiet. and i begin to notice more in her.


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    dotstrue perfectiondots
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    her words...
    that voice...
    melodious and innocent
    yet...trembles with fear
    but too silent t notice

    i notice it though
    i can hear her screaming
    when she laughs
    i can see anger
    when she smiles
    i feel a cold aura
    when she touches me

    she hides it so well
    but i see everything
    within these bloodshot eyes

    and within them
    i see her
    as perfect...




    Submitted on 2007-04-05 13:57:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good work. I have someone like this in my life, if it's even possible to love and despise someone at the same time. That's how I feel. It's makes it hard.
    | Posted on 2007-04-05 00:00:00 | by t0_eazy | [ Reply to This ]
      If this isn't fiction for you,
    If this isn't a love that is true,
    Then this is life.
    Nice piece.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2007-04-05 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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