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    dots Submission Name: absolutiondots
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    Author: lolavie
    ASL Info:    23/female/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 70/175/103
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsabsolutiondots
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    speak to me
    but only if you have no lips
    so you can understand the meaning
    of listening

    Hold me
    but only if you have no arms
    so you can fully comprehend protecting
    me from harm


    Complicate the situation even more
    war of words are battling on
    leave me when you go

    Understate emotions that hide
    Doors left open, room to breathe
    how you get so cold






    Submitted on 2007-04-06 00:38:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, it kinda took my breath away. Very earthy in its form and honest admissions. I just finished a classroom interactions class and your first stanza could read from an active listening manual lol. The only thing I was curious about was stanza three. It just doesn't seem to come out of the same mold as the rest of the poem. One and two are clear challenges to another. I think my main problem is with "Complicate the situation even more" It isn't as discriptive as everything else. Just my opinion mind you. Feel free to ignore me completely if you so chose lol. Again wonderful poem that I think is going to make it to my fav's list.
    | Posted on 2007-04-16 00:00:00 | by tagit | [ Reply to This ]
      girrrrrrrrrrl.... i get so jealous sometimes, but only on this site. which is good i guess. even if i don't really enjoy the taste of humble pie.

    your piece resonates so simply and truthfully. everything that we are, and everything that we do as people is subjective. it's coloured by what we feel and what we think.

    so for us to really be objective, we have to take away the things that get in the way. lips, so we can listen, and not just wait to speak. holding someone without arms, so that we can truly understand what holding a person means.

    that's probably my favourite image. holding someone without arms. because it's not just a physical embrace, is it? it's so much more. so very much more. but instead, we choose to search out only the physical... too many times have i have been abandoned by being held. and i don't even think i came to the full realization of that until i read your words.

    leave me when you go.

    perfection.

    every time he left me, he took me with him. and he knew it. i was this empty, meaningless, inconsolable shell. but i was the stupid one, because i was the one who opened the door every time he knocked.

    thanks for resonating, darling. it was worth the read, ten times over.

    | Posted on 2007-04-06 00:00:00 | by freeradical | [ Reply to This ]


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