i like, i like!!!
it shows that your a bit....insecure.
that you want to KNOW more in order to HAVE more. yes?
i was a bit thrown off though on the 20th and 21st line. i had to read it a couple times to finally figure out that it basicly repeating itself....you should do something about one of those lines. some what reword one of them.
this gives me a whole different perspective on somebody else now. maybe i should've slow down for her. this write is an inspiring one for me. now i see where i went wrong....
Well, as you can see baby, this poem may have been premature! Things have changed a bit huh? :) No room for doubt anymore... it's you and I forever. I eagerly anticipate the future! As far as you not being able to read me, you do! There's just not that much left to read because I share everything openly with you. and, like you say in this poem, I will never leave your side.
As far as the poem itself goes, it is an excellent write. I'm sure many readers, if not all of them can relate to the emotions you speak of. It is well structured, and flows very nicely. I think it could use more detail in the middle, but I love the last few lines! Plus, I am so very happy to see you write about something other than your immediate family and their tragic circumstances.