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    dots Submission Name: The Good Poemdots
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    Author: Lelian Marie
    ASL Info:    16, star, neverland
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 31/22/32
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 436
    Average Vote:    2.0000
    Bytes: 192



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    dotsThe Good Poemdots
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    we only met so recently
    it feels like i have known
    you forever and some how
    deep down inside i want
    to meet in person so we
    can be together





    Submitted on 2007-04-06 04:58:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This seems more like a thought fragment than a poem to me. The thought is pleasant but there isn't much to it to get the reader totally invested.
    | Posted on 2007-04-06 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]


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