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    dots Submission Name: Rosa Mystica dots

    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 698
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dots Rosa Mystica dots

    So iridescent as the sea at dawn,
    Your smile enchantment and pure sorcery,
    Your eyes of polished jet so cryptically
    They shine! I dream you on some flowered lawn
    Where roses grow and giant lilies fawn,
    And hills above each flowered, purple lea
    From golden lakes down to a silver sea
    Are by a plenipotent angel drawn.

    I spy a train of steeds, and in the van
    You lead the armies of a golden day,
    Some long and otherworldly caravan
    Like troops of gleaming angels in array,
    And when, at length, you reach me after years,
    With your long hair you’ll dry my dripping tears.

    Submitted on 2007-04-06 11:26:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      For one, I love the word "plenipotent" :]

    Two, this was a well-conceived, lovely poem. It was lyrical and descriptive and image-laden...

    The last line is really nice, too. I can just see al the images in my head.
    | Posted on 2007-04-17 00:00:00 | by wovenwords | [ Reply to This ]
      well, this is very melodic and tender as a sonnet should be and concluded well. The title seems appropriate as it seems renders a strong ethereal quality.

    Well done.

    Take care,

    | Posted on 2007-04-08 00:00:00 | by vohomegirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I kind of agree that there should be more but only because what you have is so good already. The style reminds me of one of days past, perhaps the 1800's/Victorian. I think its a new favorite!
    | Posted on 2007-04-06 00:00:00 | by brich2929 | [ Reply to This ]
      the picture you paint for me is so vivid, so very alive and a part of the world that i cant help but be drawn to it......

    it is life and yet it is art, too precious to be anything that could die, and therefore it is not alive, it is more than alive....

    it is a faerie tale....

    | Posted on 2007-04-06 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! this is beautiful imagery,
    this is perfectly voiced thought and feeling, it runs together so well and is so descriptive of your view,
    I love it, don't mind if I favor it!

    | Posted on 2007-04-06 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]

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