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    dots Submission Name: C & C (By Request)dots
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    Author: Agent V.
    ASL Info:    23/girl/small town
    Elite Ratio:    7.23 - 38/29/24
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       What's your vice?


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    dotsC & C (By Request)dots
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    Itís time to get intellectually intimate
    and I canít sleep Iím living with fire.
    If thereís a world out there to be ignited
    drown me with the passion, the life
    but I find nothing but resistance
    in the condition calmly called home
    and I feel I must obey.

    What happened to the flavor of nicotine
    inducing spirit and the physical to sync with lust
    unable to fend this off alone
    serious to the point of provocative
    paranoiaís etched into these nerves again
    with every twitch this body shivers
    and thereís no caffeine in this system.

    Realityís a dusty photograph
    forgotten in a corner of the attic
    not soon to be discovered
    but important enough to muse.

    Drinking coffee to the point of realism
    smoking just to sustain a reflection.




    Submitted on 2007-04-06 14:42:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Mirror mirror on the wall what's it like to be so transparent?

    "but important enough to muse" try "ponder" in place of muse and do tell what you think.

    "...and the spirit to physical" try "physicality" in place of "physical". In fact,

    "What happened to the flavor of nicotine
    inducing spirit and the physicality to sync
    with lust unable to fend this off alone
    serious to the point of provocative
    paranoia's etched into these nerves
    again with every twitch this body shivers
    and there's no caffeine in this system."

    I think that way...it just seems to fit this piece better.

    Also, S1, "I feel I must obey", what if "I must obey"?
    | Posted on 2007-04-09 00:00:00 | by Fizzlethorpe | [ Reply to This ]


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