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    dots Submission Name: the next logical stepdots
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    Author: honus
    Elite Ratio:    4.78 - 90/96/32
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsthe next logical stepdots
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    I like the word blood
    and the words gun fire.
    explosions in zero gravity
    are fun on the big screen.
    pyrotechnical colors
    photoshopped
    into blue frames
    reel me in.
    I love it
    when ancient soldiers
    disembowel their foes
    with vivid detail,
    quick spots
    pollocking the screen
    with carnage.
    I am tired of plots
    tying things together.
    we need films
    of the world
    doing what it does
    when the parameters of morality
    are shuttered out.
    really,
    its the next logical step.




    Submitted on 2007-04-06 19:31:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      logic? such a funny thing. i've never understood it myself. and even though your piece walked the line of gory with ease and aplomb, i found myself liking it.

    strange, because i'm usually much more into the romantic type bull[censored] and people professing their forever love, for the flavour of the month.

    but i really liked this. piece by piece deconstruction and critique. ready for it? too bad, it's happening anyways :P

    I like the word blood
    and the words gun fire.

    in one of the scenes of the play i'm working in right now, the character slices her hands and slides her bloody hand all over her ex lesbian lover, telling her she is a wolf and everything is hers. it's so raw and powerful, deadly sexy... this remind me of that. because you're not saying anything right out- you're saying you like it, something much more sinister.

    explosions in zero gravity
    are fun on the big screen.
    pyrotechnical colors
    photoshopped
    into blue frames
    reel me in.

    you fish you. it's almost as if you can't help it, the way you phrased these lines... you're a fish, explosions are the fisherman. sexy.

    I love it
    when ancient soldiers
    disembowel their foes
    with vivid detail,
    quick spots
    pollocking the screen
    with carnage.

    carnage is hot. i think it's kind of turning me on. the way you describe it, anyways.

    I am tired of plots
    tying things together.
    we need films
    of the world
    doing what it does
    when the parameters of morality
    are shuttered out.
    really,
    its the next logical step.

    logical steps are going the way of the dodo, thank god. i love illogic. and this piece.
    | Posted on 2007-04-06 00:00:00 | by freeradical | [ Reply to This ]


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