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    dots Submission Name: Playing with Lovedots

    Author: deathbroken
    Elite Ratio:    2.54 - 57/142/38
    Words: 213
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       A little bit of fun. =]

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    dotsPlaying with Lovedots

    We stare at each other
    above the green table
    in our hands, two cards.
    We played poker, as we stared.

    Lust was visible, so was desire
    Each card in hand we raised the bets
    Playing with love, it was dangerous
    We took risks, not holding back

    I could see it in his eyes.
    Just like he could see it in mine.
    The love, want and need
    I had to control myself
    From reaching over and taking him

    We checked for a round,
    our heads filled with uncontrollable thoughts
    I knew what he was thinking
    About the nights we had
    the love we shared

    The final card came out
    Ironically it was the ace of heart
    I felt a lump in my throat, putting it all in
    He did the same, taking risks once again

    I met his eyes, resisted the temptation
    He put down his cards, with a look or triumph
    Out of luck, a full house
    I sighed before putting mine down
    I saw his eyes widened and I smirked.
    "I guess now we know who'll be on top"
    I grinned and grabbed him

    among the moans our cards lay forgotten
    In my hand I knew I had won
    The Royal Flush of Hearts.


    Submitted on 2007-04-07 05:35:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      a different way of writting something i never read before, i like it passion i felt from it a strong love, ty
    | Posted on 2007-04-13 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]
      nice one...
    maybe i should do that sometime soon...
    *.* <---eyes twinkling in mischief
    you really do have spunk dont you?
    and obviously more then a spark of imagination.
    i on the other hand have a "writer's" block
    i should read more of your work.

    very original
    | Posted on 2007-04-11 00:00:00 | by rubymoon | [ Reply to This ]
      theres a song about playing poker by Townes VanZandt called 'Mr.Mudd and Mr.Gold'
    its kinda like this. and you can can remind me of something townes wrote than its a good thing. very nice work, overall.
    | Posted on 2007-04-07 00:00:00 | by HappyBuddaH | [ Reply to This ]

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