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Playing with Love

Author: deathbroken
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A little bit of fun. =]

Playing with Love

We stare at each other
above the green table
in our hands, two cards.
We played poker, as we stared.

Lust was visible, so was desire
Each card in hand we raised the bets
Playing with love, it was dangerous
We took risks, not holding back

I could see it in his eyes.
Just like he could see it in mine.
The love, want and need
I had to control myself
From reaching over and taking him

We checked for a round,
our heads filled with uncontrollable thoughts
I knew what he was thinking
About the nights we had
the love we shared

The final card came out
Ironically it was the ace of heart
I felt a lump in my throat, putting it all in
He did the same, taking risks once again

I met his eyes, resisted the temptation
He put down his cards, with a look or triumph
Out of luck, a full house
I sighed before putting mine down
I saw his eyes widened and I smirked.
"I guess now we know who'll be on top"
I grinned and grabbed him

among the moans our cards lay forgotten
In my hand I knew I had won
The Royal Flush of Hearts.


Submitted on 2007-04-07 05:35:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  a different way of writting something i never read before, i like it passion i felt from it a strong love, ty
| Posted on 2007-04-13 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]
  nice one...
maybe i should do that sometime soon...
*.* <---eyes twinkling in mischief
you really do have spunk dont you?
and obviously more then a spark of imagination.
i on the other hand have a "writer's" block
i should read more of your work.

very original
| Posted on 2007-04-11 00:00:00 | by rubymoon | [ Reply to This ]
  theres a song about playing poker by Townes VanZandt called 'Mr.Mudd and Mr.Gold'
its kinda like this. and you can can remind me of something townes wrote than its a good thing. very nice work, overall.
| Posted on 2007-04-07 00:00:00 | by HappyBuddaH | [ Reply to This ]

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