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    dots Submission Name: Without me, without youdots
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    Author: LadyMerlina
    ASL Info:    24/ F/ Montreal
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 60/93/58
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsWithout me, without youdots
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    The view vanished.
    Like an echo lost.
    I donít know why,
    I thought of you
    and my heart turned to frost.

    Your words seemed happy, so happy.
    Without me.

    I had turned away from you
    Turned away, in my own way.
    And rather, turned to,
    a life without you.

    Always expecting a little sigh of sadness,
    My lovers knew I was bitter and told me so.
    Itís strange how I held on tighter to them
    and how itís you I let go.

    I was torn and demolished
    Thought I could never be loved or cherished.
    Lost in a view, of a life without you.
    I saw darkness without shades of greys
    Then I began to embrace this haze.
    Caress it and live by its ways.

    It became a view of life without me,
    without you.





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