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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    i feel in the darb weather toppled
    graving every second with a start
    these days are miracles now
    stollen heartbeats i thought i'd never find

    my fingers twisting in the night
    the moist clutch of deepest breath
    wild colours rising through my teeth
    like my skin should surely meet the moon

    i recently vacated my selves
    found new ways to love your eyes
    explored intricate islands
    across my blue back
    a third of the world's bird population
    lives in my hair
    reclining in palmistry

    the seeds of my tongue
    vested in lovers spit
    breathe the day a turning leaf
    nostrils like flared clouds
    groves of ash trees in your heart
    opening like you do
    i'm surprised i can still walk

    i'm only standing for the season
    the sidewalks like a drum
    the way puzzles become partnered
    when the sky is a door

    we are the wild children here
    disheveled heads and feet of stone
    in my hands i hold the faces
    of the girl who always gets away




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      BEAUTIFUL, the human abstract the person of the world plain honesty and the eloquence of a dreamer. sheer beauty

    in your shadow
    | Posted on 2007-04-08 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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