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    dots Submission Name: candycoatedwaterdropsdots

    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    58/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2778/1297/258
    Words: 33
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    if the soft flesh
    at the base of your neck
    weren't so delicious
    I'd probably not
    be savoring another
    sample, lightly seasoned
    with a tumbler of kisses

    but of course
    I am

    Submitted on 2007-04-07 23:05:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well Bill, that was downright sexy!

    NIce to read you again.

    | Posted on 2007-05-21 00:00:00 | by annie0888 | [ Reply to This ]
      Short and sweet, I like it. The ending is very effective. take care nessie
    | Posted on 2007-04-29 00:00:00 | by comradenessie | [ Reply to This ]
      i just got back from my brother's wedding yesterday, so i'm already feeling weak and sentimental about this sort of stuff, and then i had to read this piece. it is really sweet and romantic, and i'm feeling really mushy right now. haha

    i also read the comment that freeradical wrote, and i have to say i feel the same way about being plundered. but i have hope that there is somebody for me who will appreciate me and the little details about me, instead of just how i can make him feel.

    very good poem. i love it <3

    | Posted on 2007-04-08 00:00:00 | by slickviper097 | [ Reply to This ]

    so sweet. brevity is something that tends to escape me. and pieces like this remind me of why they are important. it may not seem a piece of any important, but whispered sweet nothings are not usually lengthy.

    and as a woman, they are what make my heart flutter. they are what make the long distance phone conversations when i couldn't be near him, worth it. they are what stole my breath, and made me fall in love over and over again.

    and the way you express it, so perfectly. in some of (in my opinion) best earlier pieces, the base of the neck, the stretch of skin directly between a person's collarbone and ear, that is where we remember the scent and taste of our lovers. the skin there is softest, most vulnerable, most fragile.

    pieces like this, make want to go back to being the whimsical passionate darling girl that i was. to find a man that would appreciate and not plunder.

    maybe i can go back. i'm just worried that i'll end up being plundered all over again.
    | Posted on 2007-04-07 00:00:00 | by freeradical | [ Reply to This ]

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