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    dots Submission Name: Devils in the Meadows (Leak)dots
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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/807/391
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsDevils in the Meadows (Leak)dots
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    Another mothers crying in a bedroom
    her daughter died that afternoon
    She ran across the street
    where a car and her sadly meet

    Dear God why
    does the innocent dies
    when there's devils
    in the meadows
    seeking souls of innocent ones
    like our daughters and sons
    Dear God are you seeing
    all the tears glissering
    falling down upon their face
    sadly they have been betrayed

    A father stressing and can't get any sleep
    his son been missing now for weeks
    they took in from his bedroom
    that same afternoon

    Dear God are you seeing
    all the tears glissering
    falling down upon my face
    sadly I have been betrayed
    Dear God why
    does the innocent ones die
    when there are devils
    in the meadows
    seeking souls of the innocent ones
    like our daughters and our sons




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