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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/807/391
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    Oh Lord
    I think I messed up by wanting more
    wasn't satisfied with what I had
    and now I'm alone and it all so bad
    how could I have done that to the one I love
    help me Lord above

    There is anything I would do
    to make this life complete with you
    I know it's late
    but I am willing to make up the mistake
    I know that you must have heard this before
    this time I want you to know I won't do it anymore

    It'll be so good
    if we made up cause you understood
    how I love you deep inside
    hoping you'll undestand this rhyme
    a poem of a lost life
    a love like this is so right
    I want you to know there is nowhere I rather be
    then holding you endlessly...




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