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    dots Submission Name: It's Youdots
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    Author: thetwilight
    ASL Info:    23/F/Ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 81/68/15
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 862
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 762



    Description:
       Written by a shy friend of mine. Intended for music & song. Enjoy!


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    dotsIt's Youdots
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    there's sand in my shoes
    from following you
    and looking down's
    such a perfect view
    cos i can't look up
    it's nothing new
    it's just what i do
    just because

    it had to be you
    no other would do
    your perfect frown
    comes right on cue
    and then i fuck up
    it's what i do
    it's not nothing new
    just because
    just because

    you're so pretty when you know that you're right
    waltzing between me and the dying twilight
    that spun off your electric blues
    that splits a soul in two
    and i don't put up much of a fight
    cos i know that you know that you're right




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      This is so simple and so perfect, I love it, I especially love this part " waltzing between me and the dying twilight
    that spun off your electric blues
    that splits a soul in two"
    great work
    I think I will favor this write!
    | Posted on 2007-04-09 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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