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    dots Submission Name: A True Mandots

    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 775
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsA True Mandots

    Baby girl You'll be fine
    I know breaking up,
    is hard for you at this time.
    but he treated you like a cheap bottle of wine

    Im willing to give u time
    I'll be there any at any time
    Just listen to the this little rhyme

    "Baby Girl Give it time
    Sooner or Later
    That boy want even matter"

    Stop and listen the little voice in your mind
    I'm the nicest, finest, kindest guy of this time,
    I'm lucky to call u mine.

    You seem to be in a diffcult situation
    With your ex boyfriend
    I'll give you a hand
    Like a true man
    Just lay back and relax
    While i write you my expressive lines

    "Baby Girl Give it time
    Sooner or Later
    That boy want even matter"

    You got me feeling so twisted
    You got me wondering how you get so fly.
    and why your not up in the heavens with those other beautiful guardians.

    I always will be here night and day
    you know my number and you know where I live

    "Baby Girl Give it time
    Sooner or Later
    That boy want even matter"

    I will always love you.

    Submitted on 2007-04-08 13:04:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I loved the emotions in this poem.
    A true man would certainly treat
    a women like this. Great Write..


    | Posted on 2007-08-12 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
      hey love. im in school and i just started to read your stuff. I love you more than anything else in the world, and this stuff youre writeing to me is. . . . .well it makes me smile. I love it. Youve got talent honey, and its great that youre using it. :)
    | Posted on 2007-04-16 00:00:00 | by Jessica Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. once again you have brought a tear to my eyes you really do know how to write please keep up the great work.

    ~~becka marie~~
    | Posted on 2007-04-10 00:00:00 | by boo boo | [ Reply to This ]

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