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    dots Submission Name: Saved by a demondots
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    Author: rubymoon
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    Words: 190
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    dotsSaved by a demondots
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    Looking back at photos,
    I saw how I was as a child.
    Even at seven, I already learned.
    Learned to put on a mask,
    I already learned to hide.
    I started walking a lonely path.
    A path that will eventually bring me here,
    A crossroad of my life.
    To choose to reject love and be a demon?
    Or to accept love and be a mortal?

    A demon told me tonight.
    He told me of the prices…
    What we have to face as a demon.
    He never thought I would chose this path,
    Never thought I will turn like him…
    Except for one thing,
    I murdered someone and he saved that person.
    Now he is trying to save me.
    Stripping himself of being a demon. Why?
    To save that person and me from myself.

    I knew the price,
    Still I killed him,
    Him, the one I longed and dreamt for,
    The one that accepted my twisted soul.
    I rejected him. My dream, my love.
    I was so close to walking down that path.
    But I was saved.
    He was saved.
    Saved by a demon,
    The final irony of it…




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      this is really creative and i never really looked at things that way.
    like you said, it is pretty ironic.

    Even at seven, I already learned.
    Learned to put on a mask,

    i really liked that and it just kind of spoke to me and made a lot of sense.
    i kinda like how it's somewhat like a story and yet something deeper and more than that.
    Peace<3

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    | Posted on 2007-04-10 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]


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